A fragment

[occultatio]

(sung rapidly)

The view from above has a start and an end,
from the dragon your enemy, eagle your friend,
and that distance is traveled again and again
by that greatest of all the gods, Ratatosk!

The Aesir and Vanir, the Jotuns and trolls,
the heroes of men and their epics so bold,
and all of the battles the Seeress foretold
play a weak second fiddle to Ratatosk!

Comments

[weirdquark]

Heh.

Thrud says something along the lines of "excellent" but points out that it doesn't quite scan. I say Ratatosk would not worry about such things, possibly because he would be going to fast to notice.

[occultatio.livejournal.com]

It totally does scan, it just (as I pointed out to Tiamat) can't be put to the same music as MBME.

[weirdquark]

::snerk:: Okay, fair enough. To what music do you put it?

[occultatio.livejournal.com]

I don't, yet. I just hear the rhythm in my head. It's just constantly dactylic, except that you pause for a beat after the end of the first two lines of the second stanza.

[gaudior.livejournal.com]

Deeply amused, and want to hear it sung to figure out what the hell you do with the scansion in the last line of each verse.